redundant use of preposition

Question

"An opportunity for a complete positive transformation of your child for which you have always aspired for".

The above sentence appears on the board of a private primary school. I think the writer has made a redundancy in use of preposition. The sentence should correctly read as follows:

"An opportunity for a complete positive transformation of your child which you have always aspired for."

or:

"An opportunity for a complete positive transformation of your child for which you have always aspired."

Yes, you're right. You can use any of the sentences you wrote below. The one written on the school board is incorrect. — v kumar, Feb 18 '15 at 11:02
Don't believe Indian private schools! Most of them commit blunders! :) — Maulik V, Feb 18 '15 at 11:04

score 1 · Answer 1 · answered Feb 18 '15 at 11:50

You're absolutely right. I'm not sure if it breaks a formal grammatical rule, but it certainly sounds clumsy. I would even rewrite the sentence entirely:

An opportunity for a complete and positive transformation of your child that you've always aspired for.

Even then I dislike what it's saying; it implies that everyone's child is horrible and in dire need of a transformation that only the school can provide. That's just a personal thought though, and has no bearing on the validity of the sentence.

redundant use of preposition

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